ext_32563 ([identity profile] cyan-blue.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] maudite_a_deux 2003-01-29 09:45 pm (UTC)

Again, I like it :-) A few comments this time:

> Not much luck so far, but he's, well, not exactly optimistic, you know
> Snape, but he thinks it will work if he can find the right proportion
> to substitute.

That sentence is a bit run-on.

> "Girl's blouse."

I haven't read the books... is that an expression used in them?

Also - is it in character for Hermione to worry that Harry will get hurt surfing? (Agan, haven't read the books, so...)

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